One day it will happen for the good of your heart,
but evil will lurk in the shadow.
Keep your mind open and traverse the turns,
And stay off the straight and narrow.
Fight the instinct to hide at will,
To surrender yourself to the night.
No one will come because no one cares,
If you survive or not your own plight.
You're in this forever 'til death has his day,
Screaming down further and further.
Running from horrors that play in your mind,
And forgetting about your own murder.
The light in your eyes is red from distance,
Pits of memories once been.
Who is to know what will happen next,
At least this was just a bad dream.
- I really wanted this to seem like there was no way out, to be in-coherent, yet making sense all at the same time. I feel like i succeeded in most ways, but i dont know if i captured the relief from waking up and realizing it was only a nightmare. Maybe I'll come back to this and end it differently one day.
The nightmare part is spot on, the feeling I get from reading this feels just like the crazier kind of nightmare. I agree that the wake-up isn't filled with relief, but then again, from some nightmares, the negative emotions from the dream are so strong that even waking up can't shake them, and so the feeling isn't relief, at least not yet. Very well written, I will definitely come back and read this again!
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